Revision of Academic Essay

My strategy for revising my academic essay will mainly consist of shortening the length by getting rid of the dense amount of information that I provided. Instead of informational pieces, I will include opinion based ideas that my audience will be able to relate to. I will approach my readers with an informed tone, one that will help convince readers that social media has gained large amounts of use by professional athletes. I will also use a few examples, but ones that are very strong and compelling.