Revising Strategy

For my revised paper, I will take out much of my information to shorten my paper. The tone and language will be much less formal and more personalized that my first draft. I will take out some of the fact-based content and add more opinion-based content. My paper focuses on how the fashion industry has been altered by the use of social media, and my revised paper will focus a bit more on how it will continue in the future as well.