Revising

When I start to revise my research paper to a persuasive essay for a public audience, I will edit out much of the information and insert some opinion related information. I will also add persuasive language to help my audience see my point of view. I will keep my argument the same from how athletes cause a negative perception on themselves but I will add different evidence to help put my point across. I will add evidence such as statistics and use athletes persona as a negative effect to help my paper.